Definitely interesting. Now for a couple of writing issues. "was sliding" is "slid". "wrapped tightly" is "wrapped tight". Find your other ly words and figure out how your characters are perceiving those concepts. Describe the look on Katy's father's face that she sees and how that clues her into his mood as they walk back. I like the story even if it turns out to be the well of 10000 soups.
Definitely interesting. Now for a couple of writing issues. "was sliding" is "slid". "wrapped tightly" is "wrapped tight". Find your other ly words and figure out how your characters are perceiving those concepts. Describe the look on Katy's father's face that she sees and how that clues her into his mood as they walk back. I like the story even if it turns out to be the well of 10000 soups.
I'll check into that. Thanks!
Glad you like it, Jelly!